A new line of thought for SM/Ranma/Nuku nuku

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A new line of thought for SM/Ranma/Nuku nuku

Postby talonhunter » Sat Jan 12, 2008 7:39 pm

This Idea hit me while changing jobs recently and Now have had the time to start on it. I know it hasn't gotten very far yet, but I would like some input before I make a commitment to a new story with my others on a temporary job iduced hiaitus. With that being said, here are the Synopsis and part of the new story.

synopsis: What if instead of falling into the spring of drown girl, ranma fell into the spring of drown kitten and went neko, but before the neko could be broken, Ranma gets hurt by saving the godson of a scientist and the scientist happens to be Ono Tofu. Employed by Mishima heavy industries, Tofu takes a highly experimental android frame and uses it to "save" ranmas life, but in turn creates the cat brained androbot named Nuku Nuku. The Daughter of one of the owners of Mishima , one Nabiki Tendo, tries to capture Ranma/Nuku, as Kasumi tends to the life of a housewife to Tofu. Akane and Ukyo are the hot shot pilot test team assigned by Nabiki to bring the androbot in and Shampoo is the training specialist brought over by Soun to bring the girls up to snuff. once Ranma/Nuku finally breaks the neko ken, she wanders arround until she hooks up with the senshi and helps them out until Mishima finds out where the androbot has been hiding in Juuban and becomes Sailor Mau.



Prologue

Timeline: Some time just before the battle between Beryl’s troops and the silver court...

"Asoko, do you have your instructions?" asks the woman.

"Yes, your majesty." comes a younger voice from the shadows.

"I am grieved to do this to you, but the others are too well known. I am sorry your mother never got the chance to learn of your choice and selection. “the queen said.

"We will tell her when this matter is settled. I know it can't be helped right now as even your own daughter has had to grow and enter service." the younger voice said.

"Still, you and she are the only ones to be ready at this time. The others have yet to meet with their star seeds and forge their mana ties." the queen sighs.

"It's not that they haven't been trying, my queen, It just seems to take longer to form a bond with a secondary mana tap without the aid of magic and there just hasn't been any to spare from their worlds." comes from the shadows, slightly apologetic.

"I am not blaming them, Asoko. I just wish this could have been avoided. Now, get down there and scout the situation. Don't try anything on your own. And Asoko, please return to us safe." said the queen.

"Yes my queen.” came the voice from the shadows. As the figure turned, you could see a flash of red hair as the moonlight caught it, but none, not even the queen herself, saw the tears coming from the young girls’ friend and princess. A soft whisper goes unheard "Please be safe, Sailor Mau..."

Ranma Nuku, Sailor Mau

Sorry, I don’t own Ranma, Sailor Moon, or Nuku Nuku. Just borrowing the characters for a test drive and I will try not to spill anything on them.

Chapter One... Tag

It was just another training ground. At least it was suppose to be another training ground. But this one held a small boon for the young man following his sensei and father. Here he would finally be able to graduate from the families’ school and show his mother that he was truly a man. He was more than ready to show the old fool who was training him that he was the best and nothing would ever happen to make him otherwise.

"And here we are, the lost training grounds. Are you ready, BOY." the older man said.

" I've been ready, old man. Lead on and let's get started already." the younger man replied flippantly.

"BOY, if I would have taken that kind of...nevermind, follow me if you can." said the older man as he took to the air and landed on one of the bamboo poles.

"Ok pops, just so you know, I won’t be holding back this time." yells the boy.

"I would expect no less. This is a test to see if you are truly ready. Now stop your yammerin' and get up here. Or are you just some weak little GIRL!!!" yells the older man from the top of his pole.

"You take that back, old fart!" yells the younger man as he jumps to the top of the polls near the older man.

As the fight goes on, the older man is hard pressed to keep up and within a few minutes, he is completely on the defensive. 'damn, the boy has gotten too good. I can't keep up anymore.' the older man thinks. Just then the younger man flies in from a blind side and the only thing that saves Genma Soatome is the fact he is out of shape, tired and starts to fall as the young man comes flying just past his now falling body. To late the young man sees his father fall towards the ground and into the thick thatch grass at the base of the pole.

'Well, at least the old fool had a soft landing.' the boy thought. Trying to arrest his own movements, he lands on a rotting bamboo post and it snaps under his weight.’ Guess this means I do laundry and get a bath at the same time.' he thinks. That is the last thing Ranma Soatome will remember for a very long time.

Genma rolled as he hit the grass. The next thing he heard was the pole breaking under the boys’ weight and looking over to the area of the sound, he sees his son hit the water with a large splash. 'Ha, that will teach the boy to respect me.' he thought. Walking towards the pool, He almost trips over a sign. With a broken piece of rotten bamboo still nailed to it Genma picked it up and tried to read the weathered and barely legible script. Written in 5 different Asian languages, were the words that would haunt him for the rest of his days. <WARNING!!! DANGER!!! These are the cursed pools, Enter at own risk.>

"RANMA!!!" he cried and ran to the pools edge to see a small red cat climbing out of the water and dragging what was left of a white Gi top, torn to shreds. The cat looks up at the man and turns feral instantly. With a human sounding yowl that sounds like 'old man' Genma is soon fleeing toward his pack and hoping that the catnip is still there. Just as he gets to the pack the cat suddenly convulses and drops. Looking at the small feline near his feet, Genma sees a strange glowing mark appear on the cats head and then fades as it's light dies. 'By the Kami, Ranma. I will do what I can to make this right.' And bends over to pick up the red cat.

Six weeks later near Tokyo...

Walking down the street, Genma Soatome was in a funk. Not only had he gotten his child cursed, it had locked him in a state of perpetual frenzy. But then again, it was Neko-ken he was trained in, but to see that kind of savagery was sapping Genmas' will and he was returning to see if his old friend could help. 'It may have been better to go to Jensuko.' he thought to himself, but Nodoka had been very adamant about not taking Ranma to that part of China. 'I need to face what I have done and go see her before too much longer. Aahhh the trials of a Martial artist.' Standing outside the gate of the two story house, Genma couldn't help but laugh to himself.'Tofuu a father, who would have thought...' as he knocked on the door.

At the residence in question... Kasumi Ono was getting ready for work. 'I hope the new nanny gets here soon, father will be very displeased if I get to the office.' Just then the door bell chimes. Hurrying to the door, she sees someone she never thought to see again."Uncle Genma? What are you doing here?"

Genma was surprised to see his old training partner’s oldest daughter standing there in the home of his old college friends home. "K..Kasumi? Your here? Where is Tofuu?" he asked.

"Kyusaku is at the development labs today. Did you forget to call him and let him know you were coming by?", Kasumi asked.

"No, I called him to let him know I would be by. Did he forget again?" asked Genma.

"He must have, so what brings you by? It's been years since you left the company?" a smiling Kasumi said.

Nervously Genma brought up a small pet taxi holding a sleeping red furred cat. "This." was all he said in a flat monotone voice.

Kasumi looked at the sleeping animal and stars filled her eyes as the word "Kawai!!!" exploded from her mouth, and thus causing Genma to visibly flinch.

"What is her name?" Kasumi asked when she immediately came down from the cute-ness rush from seeing Genmas’ reaction.

"Her?" was all Genma was able to say.

"Yes, her. I thought you of all people could tell that, Uncle Genma." said Kasumi with a laugh in her voice.

"I ...I never... thought to look. It has been a...very stressful situation." said Genma.

"I see.", said Kasumi, " So does she have a name?" concern starting to grow within the young woman.

"Ranma" was all Genma was able to get out, looking down as he said it.

"Wild horse? That's no.." Kasumi started to say when she realized why Genma was at her home."Please tell me you didn't. And after your promise to Auntie Nodoka." a stern look came to the young woman’s face.

A sputtering Genma cried out, "No I didn't take him to Jensuko. I couldn't get the visas to China without Nodoka's approval for the boy. I found this little out of the way training ground in Hokaido years ago while under the old master." he shivered as he thought of the old man.

"I see." was all Kasumi said.

"Look, there were no signs of the place being nothing more than a forgotten training ground. I made a vow to my wife I would not do anything stupid while training the boy, not after my last mistake. Kasumi, I really need Tofuu's help on this. I was going to go home with Ranma after I talked to Tofuu. By the way, why are you here at his place?" Genma said.

"Kyusaku and I were married 6 months ago. After his wife 'Betty' passed on 2 years ago, leaving him to raise their son alone, I began to come over and make sure they were ok. I fell in love with him and got fathers approval to get married. You know how father is about keeping the company together." Kasumi said.

Genma did know. It was the only reason he had been 'allowed to' one, marry his wife Nodoka, Kasumi's aunt and 2nd to the old man in charge of the company. secondly, he was supposed to return to the company next month after the last round of training for his son. Sure, it was a sometimes boring job as head of security, but it at least made Nodoka proud of him.

"I know how he is. After all he did help me develop my Families branch of 'Anything Goes'. " said Genma.

It was then 7 year old Ryunosuke came running up to the door. "Kasumi-mama, who’s here..."

*** Now you are probably thinking, where is the Chinese guide during all this. Well these are the Lost training grounds, Not the cursed training grounds. No one knows of them because they are lost. Only Genma could find something like this...well also a certain lost boy we all know, but that’s another time and story. Let me know what you think so far as the ark will be compete in 4 or 5 more chapters. Bye for now. T. ***
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Postby Spokavriel » Sat Jan 12, 2008 7:44 pm

I haven't read everything yet but I am uncertain why you need the Ranma Fusion.
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Postby talonhunter » Sat Jan 12, 2008 8:01 pm

Well, the fusion is one of the few ways I can think of to bring Ranma's skills and personality to this story, but as I said, this one is a bit different for me so far as I usually just write what hits me and not try to plan out a whole ark before I even submit it. I have also only read one other story that comes close to this type of idea from Celest Byrd where Ranma became a cyborg of sorts. And with her story incomplete, It struck me as a fitting insperation and a new type of direction for a story to go.
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Postby Spokavriel » Sun Jan 13, 2008 9:38 pm

I'm still not sold on Nuku getting the brain of a reincarnated Mau who just happens to be Ranma Saotome.

And having a curse at another training ground? The lack of Visas would seem like a better excuse for making them swim the sea than the only cannon excuse of training. It would also give a reason for them traveling through the more vacant areas of China avoiding anywhere that their citizenship or other legalities would be questioned.

Is this like the spring of drowned man franchise only someone forgot to close it up properly?
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Postby jasonjkay » Mon Jan 14, 2008 8:59 am

Ok this sounds a little weird so im going to write what I think as I read and then keep what I've written.

Synopsis: This sounds a little too strange and not very Ranma like. Im not too keen on stories were Ranma charachters act out the parts of another series and then expect it to be a Ranma cross. And why is Nabiki trying to capture Ranma if the doctor who created Ranmas body is hired by the same company she works for? I must admit I dont know nuku nuku so It might be like that in the series, but why is it like that, maybe it's answeared in your chapter.

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"Yes my queen.” came the voice from the shadows. As the figure turned, you could see a flash of red hair as the moonlight caught it, but none, not even the queen herself, saw the tears coming from the young girls’ friend and princess. A soft whisper goes unheard "Please be safe, Sailor Mau..."
She Is talking to queen serenity right? And why is she crying? thats not really that clear.

"And here we are, the lost training grounds. Are you ready, BOY." the older man said.
Is this jusenkyo? because if it's not then it's less ranma like than if it is jusenkyo. As for Ranma going Neko after turing into a cat, that I can see happening. Just one question, if it is jusenkyo, whers the guide to explain about Ranmas cat curse?

'It may have been better to go to Jensuko.'
Ok that answears my question, it's not jusenkyo, so where was it?

A sputtering Genma cried out, "No I didn't take him to Jensuko. I couldn't get the visas to China without Nodoka's approval for the boy.
He swam to China so he wouldnt need a visa. Plus Genma working at the same company as kasumi in the past, I just cant see it, he's way too lazy.

After his wife 'Betty' passed on 2 years ago, leaving him to raise their son alone
Betty's a skelington, man this is really mixed up.

It was the only reason he had been 'allowed to' one, marry his wife Nodoka, Kasumi's aunt and 2nd to the old man in charge of the company.
So Nodoka, and Ranma are related to the Tendo's? There goes any wedding plans that Genama had.

Ok I know a few of the topics I bought up have been answeared later in the chapter but I'll leave them anyway so you can see what I was thinking.

Final thoughts after finishing synopsis and chapter: If Nodokas the 2nd in charge of the company and is related to the tendo's, Why would she allow Nabiki to try and catch Ranma. Even if Genma doesnt tell nodoka that Ranma is turned into a cat robot, Tofu or kasumi would, seeing as ther related. As for Ranma joining the senshi later, will ther be enouge of her body to channel the magic to become sailor mau? I mean she'll be a brain in a mechanical body. Like I said, this isnt very Ranma like in my veiw. Still might be interesting to read.
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Postby Spokavriel » Mon Jan 14, 2008 1:34 pm

Yeah that is an interesting question. Allot of Sailor Moon things seem to focus on the heart. I know it's kinda like asking which parts of Murphey were left in Robocop but knowing how much Ranma is in Nuku is an interesting question. Could a kitten heart or other organs be of any benefit?

Between Star Seeds, Talismans, Heart Crystals, etc. How are you going to connect a Senshi's spirit/powers through only a brain if you have to?
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Postby KonokoHasano » Mon Jan 14, 2008 1:46 pm

You could always go with the crazy plot device of having the magic do a Pinocchio on Ranma. Ranma would still be an android, but the magic could affect the inner workings and actually create a working Sailor Crystal and all that needed stuff.

It'd be absolutely convoluted, but if the description and work-arounds were done thoroughly, then it might work.

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Postby Spokavriel » Mon Jan 14, 2008 1:49 pm

In line with that song my observation was not intended "To make you fret to make you frown" there are things as you can see that may be strings on thee.
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Postby jasonjkay » Tue Jan 15, 2008 9:35 am

I suppose they might place her old heart into her new body, after all the brain does need blood to function. I cant imagine them using much of the original body though, most of it would definately be mechanichal. Then again, I cant really see why they wouldnt go with a mechanichal heart either.
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