Temple of Ranma's Sailor Senshi Seifuku

The part where Ranma is Ami's "Pet" will really need to let Ranma's personality show. Without speech or magical transformation it will be hard to expresss the cat as Ranma.

Meh even in Fanon Shampoo was never that bad, ironically the only male amazon who was shown any degree spineless was Shampoo's father (in Canon) who worked in the kitchen. Its funny that he does make an appearance but I do not recall any fics that actually use him at all.

This idea does have potential but as with all Ranma stories that affect his curse the question is "Why Ranma" If you are going to do anything with this story including Ranma as a cat you need to stay on the line that makes it obvious it is Ranma to the readers.

I read it over previous to my last post but saw no grammar or spelling that jumped out at me. But as to Ranma being shocked at Shampoo having TV just have him watching TV with Shampoo and a side comment about it. Perhaps with Shampoo giving some snark about being backwater.

Okay time to cool a little. When you post to this forum you need to give it time for replies to appear. It had been only three (3) days since you posted your inital post before you called it a fail even though you got feedback if only a little. Give it time. Also remove that link to a reply its just...

Also, I am not playing the village as being that backwater, at the very least they have air TV and in China both manga and Manhua (The Chinese version) are popular. The village being too backwater to know about some stuff of popular culture is fanon. This (Fanon) is what people are familiar with an...

over all it has potential. But I feel the Amazon thing is forced. I can see Cologne having suspicions but Shampoo is more direct person. Not stupid but I doubt that she would jump to 'Magical Girl' so easy without explination. Most people's view on the village is that it is so backwater that TV woul...

This will hurt, but you are asking for C&C: Alright first off My main point is that the Akane return at the end is, unless you plan to reintroduce the Tendo's later, drop unnecessarily long and complex retrocon. You can simply have the fox appear in the present as their Mother instead of a back ...

In the anime Jiraya can launch his hair as needles, its not exactly Manga cannon but do we really care about that here?

Blackcat101 wrote:Well, his hair is already quite strong, so reinforcing it with Ki would be a waste, when he could be used the ki to other things. Yes, there are uses for Ranma talents.

Perfect hair: Well,this mostly saves him time.

http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Needle_Jiz%C5%8D
Hair Armor

Personally I feel that it is a bit jarring. if you want it to start here then jump backwards, it would feel better. The main purpose of a prologue is to set the tone and setting of the story. Be more descriptive of the environment and the people, try to ensure that readers will know what they are ge...

The best mark of an artist is to leave the audience wanting more....

More please...

You left an excelent cliff hanger there.

sorry for taking so long in replying (and likely getting hopes up) I was thinking about this situation and given what just happened I can almost see a "bodyguard" being assigned since he is outed. I also think that it would be Uranus/Neptune, though more Uranus, which would guard him while...

Please let Nabiki do something stupid that will come to bite her in the ass in the end. I always love it when bad stuff happens to her. Nicely done here. heh you ask this when LawOhKi has a Nabiki avatar... -- This scene seems very well done, I see no trouble with it. (The same cannot be said for N...

I can actually see this. Ranma tends to not hold grudges. And right now his mother is the lesser evil and as such will quickly drop his troubles with her while focusing on Seto. Conversly spending more time with his mother might reverse that. He is no fool and he knows that his mother is as much bei...