The Dark Lords of Nerima, Chapter Thirteen [R/SM cross]

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Re: The Dark Lords of Nerima, Chapter Thirteen [R/SM cross]

Postby claymade » Wed Aug 26, 2009 8:33 am

Ellen Kuhfeld wrote:Sometimes that means surprises - I never expected Kuno Tatewaki and Tendo Kasumi to start courting - but it gives the story enough structure that it remains a story, instead of becoming a mere chain of incidents.

I had something like that happen to me in the first fic I ever wrote, a Street Fighter story. What Rose up and did in the middle of the fic was a complete surprise to me. (And yet it ended up being crucial--it actually led to the fundamental underlying theme of the fic finally crystallizing in my mind as to what it actually was.)

I don't expect it to happen in this fic, though. I was a lot tighter setting things up than that time, and I've even ended up having to not start a subplot or two that I had planned on putting in, so that the end product would be more focused. Ultimately, they just weren't pulling their weight, and would have been distracting to the rhythm of the story.
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Re: The Dark Lords of Nerima, Chapter Thirteen [R/SM cross]

Postby yakumo fujii » Fri Aug 28, 2009 11:20 pm

claymade wrote:Oh, don't misunderstand--it's definitely way, way too early for things to work out between them. If I called my fic "The Dark Lords of Nerima", and yet only had them be fighting the Senshi for barely more than two chapters before it all got settled and copacetic, I'd be guilty of rather unsightly false advertising. No, there's still much, much more to come in terms of NWC vs. Senshi.


Great to hear that. I assume that since Ryoga got roasted this time round, in the next round one of the senshi is gonna get battered pretty hard by the Nerima crew.
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Re: The Dark Lords of Nerima, Chapter Thirteen [R/SM cross]

Postby claymade » Sun Aug 30, 2009 11:26 pm

yakumo fujii wrote:Great to hear that. I assume that since Ryoga got roasted this time round, in the next round one of the senshi is gonna get battered pretty hard by the Nerima crew.

Heh heh, wanting eye for an eye, eh? :D

Well, can't give any spoilers, of course...
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