Wild Magic Chapter 14 (Chapter Finished)

[KonokoHasano]

You know, that's actually an interesting idea. I can just see Ranma walking around Hogwarts, and all of a sudden the fuku appears out of nowhere. She then goes slightly ballistic.

[Dumbledork]

Exactly. And the reactions of the students would be fun to watch. And even later, after the awakening of the senshi she would tranform at the worst possible moments and would have to hide constantly from reporters, fangirls and other nasties who'd constantly try to discover who this new, elusive senshi may be. And the funniest part would be that she'd never gain control of it.

[KonokoHasano]

I can actually see her using a dragon slave at least once in anger.

Dang, I absolutely LOVE that idea.

[Dumbledork]

And how about giving her some very embarrassing attacks when she's wearing the fuku? Like for example Chibi-Usa's pink heart attack or maybe the terrible but ubercute 'puppy dog eyes of doom" or other stuff like that. I even have an idea you could use as the origin of Ranma's fuku. Maybe the scientists had a big party after finishing designing the different senshi costumes and got rather drunk. And as a joke they decided to add another hidden senshi. And Ranma was the first to activate that henshin pen.

[P.H. Wise]

Wait, Ranma is getting ANOTHER powerup?

[Dumbledork]

Nah, I didn't mean it as a powerup. As if Chibi-Usa's pink hearts ever did any damage. This just a way of embarrassing Ranma. Maybe you could even use Xellos as the originator of the joke or something. As I understand it the transformtion generally enhances the normal body. It would be possibly to give Ranma only the disguise magic and the embarrassing attack as she is already too strong to benefit from the fuku's stength enhancing abilities.

[lcpoketoon]

hmm well how about it was the pen for Sailor Earth. but due to her blasting it she now will only change when the princess is in danger. Her attacks could be rose whip and lovely rose blizzard that makes a nice distraction. She could be sitting in the bath one day when suddenly Sailor Moon is in danger an she telaported to where ever she is an is dressed in the fuku, and the only way to turn back is to save the princess. Then Ranma would have to find her own way back once Sailor Moon is safe an in the case of the bath when her fuku fades away she left nude. An if you think of all the times Sailor Moon got into trouble hehe we end up with one annoyed Ranma who might go hunting the Dark Kingdom just so she can get some peace.

JAI

[Andy2kk]

Ugh, I really do like this fic, but you write way too many things like Ranma remembering that description of Usagi and telling Serenity. Sakura being Luna. Ranma meeting Usagi and Hotaru on the same day. Genma being the adopted son of Katsuhito, you really don't need things like that. Not everything needs to be connected, everyone doesn't need to be related! Seems like there are co-incidences like that all over. Would Serenity just tell Ranma everything about what happened? That bit seemed a bit rushed and I thought it would have been fine with just Serenity saying

(A small giggle came from the woman. “Forgive me for my rudeness, young lady. Allow me to introduce myself. I am, well, I was, Queen Serenity of the once flourishing Moon Kingdom. It was a glorious kingdom,)
mentioning that it fell due to civil war.

But like I said this is my fav of yours so more soon! While they're on the moon... less gravity wouldn't they be bouncing about? Or Laira at least? Liked the bit with Ranma chanelling Lina a bit more at the prospect of finding treasures... could of done with a manical excited laugh, while raring to go. lol, but smashing that henshin stick I think even Lina would agree she did the right thing there. But like you said maybe after transforming the first time, the clothes changing magic could have stuck with her... but the actual senshi power was lost with the henshin stick. That could be really funny, her clothes change when she feels she's in danger, or she's angry... another incentive to not get angry. lol.
Meetin Pluto... would pluto just let it go that she found that golden key on the moon?! If anyone, Pluto knows what is on there.

Also you'd think Ramna would be used to talking about relationships and sex by now. Ranma might look 11, but mentally she's older than that! Is it her physical age making her not able to handle things like that? Or just typical Ranma stuff?

[KonokoHasano]

Andy2kk: This is why I post my chapters here. If there's anything that doesn't truly need to be in it, then it's good to have people mention it. Ranma remembering Usagi when she sees Queen Serenity, And Queen Serenity going off on the history might be a big stretch. Maybe I could just remove that, and allow Ranma to learn it all from the info she gathered from the moon's computer.

As for the whole relationship thing: Ranma may have mental experience beyond her physical age, but she's still Ranma. The thought of being in a relationship or something similar still throws her mind for a loop. There's also the fact that her current age does have some effect on her mentality as well.

As for Genma being Katsuhito's adopted son: It was something I actually thought about around chapter four or so. It just seemed like something to put down.

Dumbledork, P.H. Wise, Icpoketoon: Something I thought about for Ranma's Senshi form was that it was originally an experimental -- and perhaps came about due to drunkenness from what Dumbledork said -- that was never truly finished. The template was created, and an test attack was given to it, but no name or purpose was announced.

My thoughts for a test attack would be 'Rainbow Light'. It shoots out a multi-colored light beam that does... no damage at all.

Also, Dumbledork, in the Sailor Moon manga, Chibi Moon's Pink Sugar Heart Attack is a serious attack that was able to kill a couple monsters or so before. Kind of sad that they turned it into a joke in the Anime.

[Dumbledork]

Damn, I really need to read the SM manga again. I haven't touched the books in 12 years (they are collecting dust on a shelf in the cellar ^_^)

[Spokavriel]

Did you get to see my earlier comment? If you did miss it I can probably count on my usual luck and get this comment posted just after the story hits fanfiction.net.

The moments of the Barkeep saying Hey to being insignificant are cute but well You didn't have any real 4th wall breaks before hand and it makes me wonder. Why now?

A few other comments on the early part don't really need to be repeted you can scroll back to them.

In fact, he told me just a month ago that he would break through the gates of Hell if it meant he had to keep her safe.

The sentiment is nice but saying something more like "if it took that to keep her safe." or "if he had to in order to keep her safe." If it meant he had to keep her safe makes it seem like an unwanted burden trying to protect her and the rest of the description doesn't fit that.

The Indignant Hey from Ranma with Washu-chan fits so much nicer than the ones from the barkeep because it is response to a character action. A note on the homework/studies. Ranma's been studying under Washu all those years and yet there's no real sign of improvment in her general knowledge. ()Correction because of the time on the moon. Nice to see some use of knowledge but I think it could have been a little more apparent in day to day life.

I'm so glad you got more into the day. It was just too much time between breakfast and bed without something there.

It’s all a little hazy, but I think I gave met and gave a werewolf a run for its money.”

Ok I know they are playing games and talking about being under the influence of catnip but Ranma isn't nipping right now so what was meant by "gave met and gave" in this line?

Queen Serenity's Password was icecream. I really enjoyed that moment.

She activated then destroied a Heshin Rod. Doesn't the power bind with the user almost automaticaly? Well good thing information on how those are made and what not should be in the computer files. Just incase there are any side effects Washu-chan and Dumbledore could probably get their heads together and if nothing else find a way to control the energy again.

I kinda regret it a little that Xellos didn't get to watch this fight. It could have been a unique perspective. But having a trap that was set years and chapters ago get him like that was a really nice touch.

I see others want Ranma to still have at least the Senshi Fuku. Can she have any control over that without the heshin stick?

I also notice you are questioning keeping in the talk with Queen Serenity. Think of it this way. She knows her power is limited and she doesn't have allot of time. She's been waiting for Millenia and finally has someone to talk to. If you were in that Serenity's place wouldn't you want to at least try to get out your whole story so you know that someone out there knows of it? The chance may never come again afterall and she had no way to know Ranma could get into the underground corridors much less access the computers data.

[KonokoHasano]

You're in luck, I haven't put it on Fanfiction.net yet

The 4th wall humor with the barkeeper does sound a little odd, but I was also going for it as well. I've always wanted to do at least a little breaking of the 4th wall in one of my fanfics, but could never find the right spot. That would probably be the only 4th wall I'd do.

I'll have to fix the part about Genma and protecting Sakura.

I also agree in that I should bring in Ranma's intelligence a little more. Not too much at a time, but just show it from time to time.

>,> The quote from talking about the cat-nip was an error on my part. It should read 'but I think I met and gave a werewolf'. It's always weird how typos can sneak up in the oddest of places.

When Ranma finds her clothes randomly changing into the fuku for the first time, she'll do a little research from the info she got from the computer. She'll also find out that the Henshin stick was a medium to transform. It wasn't necessarily needed, but without it, there'd be problems for quite a while.

[Dumbledork]

Maybe a stupid question, but could this now be considered a fukufic? Even if Ranma only had the fuku for a short while?

But seriously, how about making Ranma's fukuf even more girly than the regular ones? Maybe with lots of frills or something like that.

[KonokoHasano]

Unofficial fukufic maybe? It wouldn't be an outright true fukufic, but since there's a fuku lying around in waiting to attach itself to Ranma at completely random moments, it COULD be one.

[Spokavriel]

The Fuku only got a brief mention but it was enough to freak Ranma out even after having been a girl for over a decade. It could be described in more horrifying girly detail when it shows up in the light of day ::slowly smiles::