Draw the Curtain: Prologue and Chapter 1

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Postby Ellen Kuhfeld » Sun Mar 08, 2009 6:33 pm

ToastedPine wrote:"Hey, what the heck else was I supposed to do? Bolt?” Ranma asked defensively. “That would have made me look even more suspicious!"

That'll do nicely to provide motive both for Ranma staying, and even for him going with the agent. Only thing I'd say differently is "That would have made them even more suspcious!"

As a bonus, it gets him feeling a bit trapped. Which bothers him, but it is a situation he's used to functioning in.
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