Veela One Half Chapter 2

[Dumbledork]

Finally finished the chapter. I'll post ti as soons as I've finished checking it once more for spelling and grammar mistakes.

[Spokavriel]

Have you made any advance on Chapter 3?

[Dumbledork]

Not yet. The chapter after this one will take place in Nerima.

[Spokavriel]

Which characters are you going to have be more than Muggles? Please keep Gosenkugi as a Muggle he's dangerous enough in his occult fetish without actually being empowered

[Wyrd]

Which characters are you going to have be more than Muggles? Please keep Gosenkugi as a Muggle he's dangerous enough in his occult fetish without actually being empowered

Him being a squib would work rather well, though, explaining the degree of his obsession with performing even minor magic and his certainty that magic exists. He's unlikely to know Ranma or meet him at any point in this story, but a comment at some point to that effect could be interesting.

[Spokavriel]

Add real fuel to that fire if you make him a squib child of two magical pureblood parents. Maybe even forced to be adopted by distant cousins to hide the family shame?

[Dumbledork]

He won't appear yet. In this story the Tendo Dojo is the entrance to the Magical section of Tokyo, so the Magical World is not far away. Furinkan is a Magical School. The Nerima arc will only last for about two chapters. Ranma will follow his new sensei somewhere else to learn how to control his veela powers.

[borgrabbit]

A blue beam shot out of the stick and honed in on the pigtailed outsider

A blue beam shot out of the stick and homed in on the pigtailed outsider
Hone usually means to sharpen. Home can mean to target a moving object.

She didn’t have to wait for low.

She didn’t have to wait for long.

Still a good story. Hope there's more to come!

[Dumbledork]

Yeah. I'm rereading it atm. I hate rereading because I constantly find things I'm not happy with. This takes so much time and you'll easily see the difference with the first version posted here.

[JustinD]

"A blue beam shot out of the stick and honed in on the pigtailed outsider"
A blue beam shot out of the stick and homed in on the pigtailed outsider
Hone usually means to sharpen. Home can mean to target a moving object.

Still a good story. Hope there's more to come!

Both honed and homed makes sense to me since the generalized meaning of hone means to
*Make sharper or more focused or efficient.
*Made sharp; Made more accurate or precise.

This next bit is from http://www.thefreedictionary.com/honed
hone 1 (hn)
n.
1. A fine-grained whetstone for giving a keen edge to a cutting tool.
2. A tool with a rotating abrasive tip for enlarging holes to precise dimensions.
tr.v. honed, hon·ing, hones
1. To sharpen on a fine-grained whetstone.
2. To perfect or make more intense or effective: a speaker who honed her delivery by long practice.
[b]Phrasal Verb:
hone in
1. To move or advance toward a target or goal: The missiles honed in on the military installation.[/b]
2. To direct one's attention; focus: The lawyer honed in on the gist of the plaintiff's testimony.

[borgrabbit]

Oops. Sorry, I was using my sixties grammar education regarding honing and homing. The language changes fast, these days. For proper use, I'll accept what I found at Word Detective. I will admit that I still prefer the old, hidebound 'traditional' use. <http://www.word-detective.com/2010/03/31/home-in-hone-in/>

[Ellen Kuhfeld]

Oops. Sorry, I was using my sixties grammar education regarding honing and homing. The language changes fast, these days. For proper use, I'll accept what I found at Word Detective. I will admit that I still prefer the old, hidebound 'traditional' use. <http://www.word-detective.com/2010/03/31/home-in-hone-in/>

I have many disputes with modern English usage. Some I'll never win. The one that's currently bothering me is the difference between 'rein' and 'reign'. They can be occasionally interchanged, but not always. "To have free rein" and "to have free reign" both work. But while "rein in" works, "reign in" doesn't. There is this beast called a horse, which is controlled by something called a rein. There are kingdoms, which are controlled when the king reigns. They're both methods of control, but not the same.

As for your problem, I've honed many a blade. But it never involved aiming the thing, until considerably after the honing was done.

[borgrabbit]

As for your problem, I've honed many a blade. But it never involved aiming the thing, until considerably after the honing was done.

Pet language peeves:
Rein/reign, definitely/defiantly, hone/home, your/you're misuse, and a raft of other manglings of the language.

Correct sixties usage:
The football player honed his ball control skills, while he homed in on the other team's goal during Friday's practice.

[Wyrd]

Pet language peeves:
Rein/reign, definitely/defiantly, hone/home, your/you're misuse, and a raft of other manglings of the language.

Correct sixties usage:
The football player honed his ball control skills, while he homed in on the other team's goal during Friday's practice.

I agree with those amongst other terms that bug me through very common misuse, such as shone/shown. I pre-read for a guy who has a tendency to use the word 'transverse' a lot. I keep telling him that it doesn't exist as a word outside of geometry classes, and that he really means traverse, but he continues to make the error. It is a bit annoying.

[Ellen Kuhfeld]

I agree with those amongst other terms that bug me through very common misuse, such as shone/shown. I pre-read for a guy who has a tendency to use the word 'transverse' a lot. I keep telling him that it doesn't exist as a word outside of geometry classes, and that he really means traverse, but he continues to make the error. It is a bit annoying.

And then there's the common fanfic-writers' tendency to say 'tenants' instead of 'tenets'. Not to mention spelling the place 'Nermia'.

Judging by the enthusiasm, this is a thread hijack that's been eager to happen. While I'm at it, I'll mention the tendency to say 'the Ranma' instead of 'Ranma' and the unavoidable use of the greengrocer's apostrophe. O, tempora! O mores! What's the matter with kids today? and while you're at it, get off my lawn!