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Heir 6 opening

Postby Ozzallos » Thu Apr 13, 2006 8:04 am

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Postby Nairojam » Thu Apr 13, 2006 9:04 am

Great start, can't wait to read more!
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Postby Cheb » Thu Apr 13, 2006 9:14 am

Wow :shock: [no other words coming in mind].
...Poor Usagi :)
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Postby Tweeker » Thu Apr 13, 2006 9:38 am

yes this is a most excellent start :twisted:
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Postby Sunshine Temple » Thu Apr 13, 2006 9:42 am

Indeed.
And the Senshi get their first glance at what their queen's really like.
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Postby Guest » Thu Apr 13, 2006 10:34 am

:shock: jinkies, they didn't just tie one on...They tied several. I don't envy them upon wakening... But Minako's right. Usagi's mom IS so cool! 8)
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Postby Screwball » Thu Apr 13, 2006 10:36 am

And the future of mankind goes down the drain. Oh well. :D
Looking forward to more.
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Postby Dragon Man » Thu Apr 13, 2006 11:05 am

Wow, if the place is this trashed after one of Setsuna and Ranma's parties I'd hate to see the Palace back in the Silver Millenium when Setsuna and Serenity really got going! Plus the idea of a very drunk Hotaru scares me... considering she's a super cute living death star normally.
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Postby Siberian-Troll » Thu Apr 13, 2006 11:05 am

Four tough girl (Michiry & Hotaru probably not) are dead drunk from one bottle? To all appearences, it was the really potent red liquid. :lol:
The bottle was liter, two or five?
Great & promising opening.
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Postby Light02 » Thu Apr 13, 2006 1:57 pm

good one Ozzy...can't wait to see what you got next one this one
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Postby Ion-chan » Thu Apr 13, 2006 3:40 pm

looks good ozz!i wonder what happened and i wonder about the size of the hangovers.....
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Postby Shadow Wolf » Thu Apr 13, 2006 9:48 pm

Siberian-Troll wrote:Four tough girl (Michiry & Hotaru probably not) are dead drunk from one bottle? To all appearences, it was the really potent red liquid. :lol:
The bottle was liter, two or five?
Great & promising opening.

Well, from the close of the previous chapter, Ranma had a major head start...
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Postby Wolfhunter » Thu Apr 13, 2006 10:23 pm

Four tough girl (Michiry & Hotaru probably not) are dead drunk from one bottle? To all appearences, it was the really potent red liquid. Laughing
The bottle was liter, two or five?

Remember. This bottle of firewine is also 14 THOUSAND Years old. It's basically Jet Fuel now. ^^ Let's see you down a shot of this firewine and NOT get drunk. I don't think it's possible.
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Postby ranger5 » Thu Apr 13, 2006 10:33 pm

Plus, as I believe was stated Setsuna could drink 16 shots before passing out...and that was with it being much less old. 16 shots ain't much if the bottle is of any size.
Definately looking forward to more of this one.
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Postby Lightning » Fri Apr 14, 2006 12:34 am

Nice one ozzallos can't wait till you finish this chapter
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