Dr. Garren made his way over to computer consol and pulled a disk out of one of the slots.
Also, after typing out the part with Ranma training with the ball of water, I keep getting reminded of water bending from Avatar: The Last Airbender. The thought didn't fully register until after that small mini-scene was done.
Andy2kk wrote:So is this Sabrina going to be Ranma's master? I'm thinking even with all Ranma has learnt Sabrina could probably beat him and capture him.
Only other suggestion might be the training scenes, describe more flash back less. Almost every story that wants to increase a characters abilities or powers flashes back to some vague descriptions of what they did, and it cheapens it some how to me. Why not have at least a scene or two of Ranma sitting under a water fall and a some pokemon floating down stream onto his head? Transfer from a real time flash back some times instead of all past tense review of what he did.
I also think another nice exercise would for Ranma to catch rain drops, a future training method or something he could do in this chapter but it works well with the control exercise. Controlling a large amount of small objects at the same time like catchign grains of sand, or stoping rain drops indviualy.
I was just watching an early episode of the Maple Story anime. How about forming a rainbow colored disc of psychic energy for Ranma to surf on? Have Ranma freeze a disc of ambient water vapor with psychic energy and the light reflecting off could be like a rainbow effect coming off of a hologram, plus, the smaller mass of the vapor could provide even more efficiency. This could lead to an analog of the vacuum blades of the Yama Sen-ken.
So is this Sabrina going to be Ranma's master? I'm thinking even with all Ranma has learnt Sabrina could probably beat him and capture him.
How about for additional scenes, have that girl that Sabrina protected tag along too.
Also, since Ranma has the ability for Ice Punch, why not use that to freeze the river and ice 'fall' on it. Balance is still needed and skating is a good way to work on that and piss of the Pollywag too.
I think the surfboard or floating disc style ride is a nice idea to pursue in the long term, all though Ranma may just decide levitating himself is easier then including a third object to work with in the long term for a means of flight.
I think that person doesnt like reading flashbacks, so wants less of them. Like instead of training for a move in the present, you just add in a little flashback of him learning the move in the past. Im not really that bothered, I think it's personal preferance.Flashback less? I'm afraid I honestly don't understand...
Doesn't read right, missing a word. I think it should say, the Ralts managed to 'prove' thatthe Ralts managed to that it did have the hang of its supposed psychokinetic ability.
'created' looks wrong, i think you added a D to the end when you shouldn't.if he was taking too long to created it
P.S. Let him fly on a miniature broom.
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