No overpowering, no bashing, decent mix to naruto plotline... I like it. The best Ranma cross that i see around actually and the third best Naruto cross. And i want more.
PS. And decent OC... I love this fic.
Extravagant praise indeed!
Damn you for leaving a cliffhanger on the last chapter. I want to see how the rest of the time goes. Overall, it was a well done fic. I fully enjoyed the characterization of everyone.
Cliffhanger? Really? I didn't see it as such. The battle's over and the results are in. Then again, I know exactly what's coming next and just need to find the time and energy to turn it into words on the screen. It's bound to be different for those who don't have that.
Hayate coughed. “If you interesting again,” he said, “I'll have to disqualify you.”
You probably meant interfere.
Damned auto-complete! Cheers for the pointer. I'll fix that up before it gets posted elsewhere.
I'll have a couple of comments on the story once I finish it.
I also am confused, when and how was Tayuya's flute damaged in the fight? From Ranma's aura flare to break the genjutsu?
Ranma used his speed to get in close to Tayuya and pinch the end of the flute shut after he did his aura flare. That's the sort of trick you only let yourself get caught in the once if you can help it, and Ranma can. I'll have to go and look at it again if it's not clear.
With respect to the story I'm really enjoying a portrayal of Ranma who enjoys the chaos that springs up around him and also the way Mousse enjoys things catching up with Ranma.
I've never, ever been able to buy into the sort of characterization where Ranma really doesn't enjoy the chaos at all and wants a quiet life. It just doesn't fit in my mind with the guy who spends pretty much the entire series running around getting into more and more trouble without making even the slightest effort to change and start avoiding it.
Also curse your cliffhangering!
Hmm, a second vote for it being a cliffhanger. I just don't see it, but two votes to one is two votes to one.
I enjoyed reading it. There seems to be a propensity towards missing words in your sentences, but most everything still makes sense with a little 'fill in the blank'.
Really? I haven't heard that one before but it wouldn't surprise me too much. I tend to write in fits and spurts – days going by with virtually nothing before motivation and inspiration strikes which results in thousands of words pouring out in one go – which is an approach that'd lend itself to such mistakes. They're a bugger to spot going over it again as well.
Just read chapter 1. A major problem is that the events were rushed. Everybody just goes along with things without a protest or second thought. Ranma, Ryouga, and Mousse are all extremely - and unbelievably - accepting of their situation and adapt to it for absolutely no reason and with no bad reactions. People aren't wired that way.
You have a point there. They're used to weirdness - a demon teleports them to God only knows where? Well, it's not really any more bizarre than, say, Ryugenzawa – but I may have had them be a bit too unfussed about it.
Next, ANBU isn't a police force. They don't break up fights on street. That's what the Military Police are for, and they didn't cease to exist just because the Uchiha were slaughtered; the Uchiha made up a large percentage of the MP, but not all of it, and the force has had many years to recover from their loss. ANBU is more akin to Navy SEALs, or Army Green Berets. They are military operations teams that specialize in assassinations and other dirty jobs. They also serve as the Hokage's personal guard.
On this, I disagree with you entirely. Ranma and company are obviously, very obviously, not just some young hoodlums and they don't wear Konoha colours. Having foreign shinobi show up in their village without notice and then act so brazenly is exactly the sort of thing you'd send the dirty-work boys out for just in case. The last thing you want is to suddenly be half a dozen policemen less because you had some super-powered psychos passing through. Paranoia is a way of life for these people.
Last point - people taken to see Ibiki do not generally walk away from it with all of their body parts intact. He's not a "teddy bear", he's more like a grizzly bear. He doesn't ask questions. He demands answers, and if he doesn't get them the first time... things get very, very nasty. He is very definitely not the person they take people to casually. They take people to him when they want answers and don't care what's left when he's done. How he works was shown in a recent omake of Naruto Shippuuden: a man who acted as a fence for missing nin was captured, and was suspected of having info about Akatsuki. Ibiki had him in the stereotypical dark room with a light shining in his eyes. Ibiki asked him a few questions, and when he didn't immediately spill the answers, Ibiki said, "Okay. I tried asking politely. Now we do things my way." The omake cuts off as some very disturbing noises begin.
I've been working almost exclusively from the manga. I've seen the anime up till where it headed into filler hell and I've never felt the need to get back to it since it left it again; possibly something to do with my general disillusionment with the post-timeskip storylines.
Anyway, Ibiki always seemed more of a psychological sadist than a physical one to me. That's the impression I got from the chuunin exam arc and that was the only source I had on him to work from. From what I've seen of recent chapters of the manga, this would fit the way they dealt with the guy Jiraiya sent back from his epic showdown – no physical torture involved, just whittling away with fancy techniques.
really really good, didn't nerf any of them and managed to stay true to each character. please, oh please, let there be more soon!
Thank you. I'll be working on it, though, obviously, no promises.
In general, thanks for the feedback, people. It's appreciated.