Wyrd wrote:This is my first time reading any of it. As someone who read it straight through, I can say that it seemed very clear to me that all of the girls knew about Ranma being Hestia, and they were going to great lengths to keep Hestia from awakening or the cat from realizing who Ranma was.
LurkingGrue wrote:My first reaction on reading the first paragraph was that Ranma's reaction was too emotionally sensitive. I'll buy it as a kneejerk reaction to the stress of the visions, but I'm expecting him to settle into being less "touchy-feely". Kasumi subsequently agrees with me that this is odd in paragraph 3, so I like that.
I didn't like where Kasumi hoped the memory had been traumatic. From my reading, she is hoping that is was because otherwise she would have missed things that had already been there. To me this is not very sensitive/Kasumiesque, I think her priority would be more to comfort and hope they had not experienced something traumatic than to be worrying about whether or not she was being sensitive. I'm not explaining it very well, but it's like Kasumi's thoughts are putting the cart before the horse. Kasumi questioning/worryingabout her prior sensitivity and not missing anything is fine, but it should never follow a thought like "she hoped that the incident alone had been traumatic".
The still frozen arm went a bit too long without being mentioned. I think maybe Kasumi noticing it while ranma glomped her to cry and worrying that ranma wont catch a cold would be a good way to keep it on the reader's mind before ranma zaps it away with her magic.
The paragraph:
Saving room saves trees! And kittens! BELIEVE IT!
In any event I like the continuing development of the story. While I've liked the parts Kasumi and Nabiki have played, I'm hoping that Akane takes more of a center stage (Not over Ranma as the main character, but over all the other 2ndary characters). I feel that her relationship with Ranma is a very important part of his character, and I'm interested in seeing how it will change.
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