Ranma/ Star Wars: KOTOR crossover

[Atlan]

Yup, another Ranma/Star Wars crossover.

The premise is this: Earth is in fact located in the Star Wars galaxy, but is unknown to most anyone. It's located on the Outer Rim, and it isnt even aware that humanity isnt originally from Earth, or that the galaxy is full of inteligant life.

During the mushrooms arc (where Ranma is just a little kid), a group of slavers abduct Ranma, along with Ukyo. During the flight, Ukyo and chibi-Ranma over power the guards, and sieze controll of the ship. They (with the help of the slavers) manage to land the ship on Nar Shada.

When they land, they find the cops waiting for the slavers- they had been tiped off about the slaving opperation. They find that due to the fighting on the ship, the memory banks are useless, and the location of earth is lost forever.

Ukyo and Ranma stick togther, trying to suvive. One day, Ranma rescues a kid named Malak from some gang members, and they escort him home. When they arive at Malak's home, they find that there is a Jedi waiting there- Malak has been selected to be a jedi. The jedi notices that Ranma has a strong connection to the force, and they eventually decide to make Ranma a padawan.

By now, Ranma has aged to 8, and Ukyo has come to terms with the fact that she and Ranma will never be maried- the age gap is too much. She decides to join the republic's army.

Ranma trains hard, and quickly becomes recognised by the masters at Dantooine. He, along with a student named Reven, are considered the most powerfull of all the padawans. Ranma, Reven, Malak, and Bandon become best friends.

Reven is the first to graduate to Jedi Knight, followed by Malak, Bandon and Ranma (in order). Some time before Reven graduates, the Mandlorians begin conquering the outer rim. By the time Ranma has graduated, the Republic is fighting with everything they have- and loosing.

Reven and Ranma, frustraited by the decision of the councel not to fight back, convince Malak, Bandon, and two dozen other jedi to join the fight.

Reven quickly is recognised for his stratigic genus, and becomes admiral of the fleet in all but name. Ranma, a tactical genus, is routeenly put in charge of all ground forces. The fight is savage, and it ends when Ranma activates the Mass Shaddow Generator at Malachor V.

They suviving jedi who went to fight know that the order will never accept them back, and follow Reven to wherever he may lead. All except Ranma, who returnes to Dantooine, still hearing the screams of those who died at Malachor V echoing in his head.

The council, noting the darkness in his aura and thinking he as fallen to the dark side (instead of realizing it is the pain of those who died, and Ranma's broken link to them) Exile Ranma.

Ranma leaves for the outer rim, no longer able to use the force. He travels for years, searching for Earth, untill he runs into a republic ship, the Harbringer, and gets a ride.

At least untill he wakes up in his underwear in a certain astroid base...

Ranma, as the Exile from Kotor 2: Sith Lords, would follow the game path, mostly. Changes include both Diciple and Handmaden joining the party, and Ukyo joining as well.

[claymade]

I'm not seeing the twist, I'm afraid.

What is going to be the pull, the hook to make me want to read it? We know all the characters, we know what they're going to do, we know how this story goes... what's the draw? What's the intrigue? What's the telling change? What is reading this fic going to tell me that I don't already know?

What's your twist? That's what you'll need to discover if you want this fic to really have wings.