The Unbeatable Angel Part 1: NGE/Dokuro-chan fusion

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Postby migele » Wed Jul 05, 2006 10:30 am

fits in the omake files!
why not make it slightly differently?
They are not sent to kill him but to help him so he doesn't go nuts like in canon and makes humanity go splat?
Sabbat-chan would be another fiancee, or something, with different methods of tryinfg to reinforce Shinji's mental stability. Not quiete pleasant ones.
Dokuro decides that him having a fiancee would be better positive reinforcment and went of on her own.
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Postby GenocideHeart » Wed Jul 05, 2006 12:18 pm

lwf58 wrote:Dokuro-chan and her like are Angelic Enforcers. They are angels sent out to assassinate people that heaven thinks need to go. They each have a special magic weapon. In Dokuro's case, it's a heavy, spiked baseball bat called Excaliborg.

Dokuro-chan's weapon is commonly referred to as an Oni warclub. Oni are often depicted using them in folklore.
Just a tidbit.
Also, the correct spelling is 'Excalibolg', since it was named after two weapons of British lore, Arthur's Excalibur and Cu Chulainn's Gae Bolg.
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Postby bissek » Wed Jul 05, 2006 12:26 pm

Here's a possible way to end a Ranma Omake of this cross.
"Hey!" Akane shouted "You can't just barge in here and beat my fiance to death!"
<Insert something about Ranma hoping this means Akane actually loves him and that the malleting will stop>
"That's MY JOB!"
"Uh oh" thought Ranma.
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Postby GenocideHeart » Wed Jul 05, 2006 12:36 pm

Actually I considered a Ranma/Dokuro-chan xover... except in my idea, Dokuro-chan considered everyone ELSE but Ranma a pervert. Especially Shampoo and Kuno.
So basically, she'd go around randomly killing, reviving and traumatizing all of Nerima, while Ranma looked on with the same expression of someone watching a particularly horrifying train wreck. :lol:
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Postby Pale Wolf » Wed Jul 05, 2006 1:25 pm

Actually I considered a Ranma/Dokuro-chan xover... except in my idea, Dokuro-chan considered everyone ELSE but Ranma a pervert. Especially Shampoo and Kuno.

Considering someone else a pervert? That's... so wrong, yet so right.
So basically, she'd go around randomly killing, reviving and traumatizing all of Nerima, while Ranma looked on with the same expression of someone watching a particularly horrifying train wreck.

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Postby lwf58 » Wed Jul 05, 2006 1:36 pm

Despite the idea that they wouldn't stay dead, since none of 'em are the official target, I can't see Ranma being gleeful over the the amount of gore and spattered body parts that accompany Dokuro's momentary lapses in judgment. He'd be horrified.
Does raise the question of whether he'd feel obligated to try and get her to tone it down and be less lethal. That would be interesting, since he'd be fighting an uphill battle against her primal nature; she was created to be an assassin, so training about how not to kill would be unnatural for her.
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Postby GenocideHeart » Wed Jul 05, 2006 2:11 pm

lwf58 wrote:Despite the idea that they wouldn't stay dead, since none of 'em are the official target, I can't see Ranma being gleeful over the the amount of gore and spattered body parts that accompany Dokuro's momentary lapses in judgment. He'd be horrified.
Does raise the question of whether he'd feel obligated to try and get her to tone it down and be less lethal. That would be interesting, since he'd be fighting an uphill battle against her primal nature; she was created to be an assassin, so training about how not to kill would be unnatural for her.

That's what makes the idea fun. Well, not for Ranma, but when EVER has his life been fun? :wink:
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Postby Innortal » Wed Jul 05, 2006 2:13 pm

The Ranma idea was similar, it's just that she can't seem to kill him, but everyone else gets killed once.
Even ... :twisted: ... Kasumi.
Plus let's face it; Ranma couldn't be mean to a girl if he tried ... aside from Akane. Shampoo tried to kill him and Akane, but they're okay now. I doubt he will be too upset with Dokuro-chan.
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Postby WG_Writer » Wed Jul 05, 2006 4:11 pm

Innortal wrote:Which is why I am also trying to create a Ranma Omake File based on the series fusion as well. She just screams "Fiancee".

*Pictures her and Akane going through the Hentai Hord*
Ohh My God...
*Sees her listening to Akane's All boys are perverts claim*
There is no possible way that can not result in massive slaughter....
As to your Shinji/Dokuro pairing... I agree a litle longer, but I rarely read Eva fanfics so I can't give advise there. Perhaps a scene where she takes out an Angel then tears out Shinji's plug from 01 and glomps him, and of course a dokuro-chan follow-up. Looks good anyway.
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Postby Innortal » Wed Jul 05, 2006 5:34 pm

I can guarentee a scene where Excalibolg ended up going through the entry plug and killing Shinji.
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Postby migele » Mon Jul 10, 2006 7:42 am

It's oddly satisfying reading Shinji die over and over agin.
hmm, Shinji running in EVA-01 to and angel screaming "Save me from that angel, kill me for ever!"
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Re: The Unbeatable Angel Part 1: NGE/Dokuro-chan fusion

Postby Daniel Jess Gibson » Tue Jul 11, 2006 3:25 am

Innortal wrote:The Unbeatable Angel Part 1
A NGE/Club-to-Death Angel Dokuro-chan fusion
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Postby Epsilon » Thu Jul 13, 2006 7:14 pm

Now that I've finished watching all four eps of Dokuro-chan, I can safely add in a few things to help with the next serving of this delightful story...
The whole fiancee thing could be Kami-sama's way of thanking Shinji for the whole way he handles Third Impact and how he gives everybody the choice whether to remain as LCL or come back and live life on earth. Considering that Dokuro-chan may be a bit... impulsive when it comes to certain matters of the heart, He also sends two more candidates to woo the Third Child. They are Sabato-chan and Zakuro-chan (Dokuro-chan's younger sister who strangely looks and acts like an older sister instead). I would appreciate seeing Zakuro-chan at the least for some crazy sibling rivalry over Shinji-kun.
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Postby Innortal » Thu Jul 13, 2006 7:51 pm

Anyone have a suggestion for the stupid thing they could be out to kill Shinji for? I want to introduce that in the next chapter.
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Postby SoftRogue » Thu Jul 13, 2006 9:51 pm

Innortal wrote:Anyone have a suggestion for the stupid thing they could be out to kill Shinji for? I want to introduce that in the next chapter.

Here's a thought. One night at the appartment, Misato is sitting at the kitchen table with Pen-Pen getting smashed and laughing her ass off as she watches Dokuro-chan kill Shinji. Everytime Dokuro-chan revives Shinji, Misato makes some sort of sexual innuendo towards Shinji, causing the Shin-man to sputter in denial, which makes Dokuro-chan think that he IS being a pervert, thus wacking him into a fine paste; thus starting the whole cycle all over again.
In other words, fun for the whole family.... :lol:
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