my new First Fic!

[timdraco]

I know it sucks, its my first fic and a rough draft at that. Thats why im looking for a partner to work on it with.
If you want to preview it the storys at fanfiction.net with the id storyid=3818626.


Timdraco

[Kimina]

Sorry to say the story's sporadic, unorganized, and a complete mess.

[Spokavriel]

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\viewkind4\uc1\pard\b\i\f0\fs40 Sailor Ranma 3/4???\par \par By: Timdraco\par \par \par \b0\i0\fs32 I own all of the fanfics in the world!!!!!! \par \par \par \par Sorry my therapist tells me to let the voices in my head have there say or i'll go crazy.\par \par \par Prologue\par \par \par As a great battle rages during the rule of queen serenity, many battles where fought and many combat units deployed. The most famous of these great warriors was the bravo company of the silver nights. There commander was a fierce red headed women who's origions were lost in history. These are the events leading up to the fall of serenity's kingdom.\par \par \par Comander! a private yelled, There attacking sector 5! Good, there heading right into the queen's trap, yelled the red headed commander. After a fierce battle where the enemy youma where destroyed the commander headed back toward the moon palace to report her units status. As she walked into the waiting area, a yellow blur ran into her. Princess!! are you ok? yelled the commander, I'm fine just a little bruised, im sorry for running into you. Oh my mother wants to see you about you're wedding plans. Princess what are you talking about, im not getting married! I think thats what she mean's about wedding plans. Bye! yelled the princess as she ran off with her gardian's closely behind. Sigh it's gonna be one of those days i think. Said the commander into thin air.\par \par \par \par \par So what do you think? ive been wanting to start a sm/ranma fic for a while now and had the idea so i just wrote what i could. I'm interested in someone to coarthor this with me and im also looking for proof readers. Well next chapter should be out soon.\par \par \par Signing off! Timdraco\par \par \par \par \par Omake!\par \par As the commander walked into the throne room she noticed that the queen was looking at her funny. You're magesty is everything ok? asked the commander looking worried. Oh i was just wondering if i could get this very good looking night to be my consort, replied the queen. Er, well i guess if you like him you should ask, replied the commander. Oh she is standing right in front of me. Said the queen getting of her throne and starting to disrobe. EEEEEP! yelled the commader taking off out of the throne room. Come Back my snuggle bunny! yelled the half naked queen as she ran after the commander as the rest of the queen's guard taking bets. I say 5to1 odd's she catch's the commader in 10 minutes or less. Said the commader of the silver night's alpha company. You're on sgt, majer nabiki! yelled a private.\fs20\par

You may need a bit of work on your formatting. Is there a reason you are going with the number 34 in the title?

You have to admit this mess is a bit hard to read.

[Sunshine Temple]

You also violated rule 1-K. I recommend reading the rules before posting.

K) When creating a thread, the title should be clear and explain the content so that readers understand what the topic will be.

Stories posted in the C&C folder should have thread titles consisting of the title of the story and the chapter title and number, if any. When asking for assistance in the Fic Search folder, the title of the thread should contain a very short summary of what is being searched for. For examples, go to the end of this page.

This is so people will know what fic is posted in the C&C board. Instead of a mass of "my first/second/new fic" titles.

Also you should use the url tags to provide a link, or at least paste a link on to your fic. Just telling them the story idea makes it difficult to go to the story.

[timdraco]

just edited my story and i might have a coarthor!! so this fic will get better that is a promise! oh thanks for all the help guys, like everyones telling me i need it.


Timdraco

[timdraco]

well thats a good question. i didnt want to use the 1/2 on the storys name so i figured on using something else. when i thought about it, i came up with the idea of adding 34, im gonna use about 34 of my fanfic ideas in this one.


Timdraco

[Kimina]

That... doesn't really make sense. Changing the title with something that has no value or relevance to the title, simply putting it there so it can be different doesn't really do anything. This is just my personal opinion, but I don't think you're ready to be making stories.

[Tuisto]

Even reworked, two paragraphs just doesn't make a story.
I saw in the other thread that you say you cannot finish a story, but honestly, I have to ask, have you ever even really started one?
Try, try, try again. Detail, and a proper well-thought out story line helps, instead of random, jumbled messes that make no sense. And it doesn't help any that half of the so-called "Prologue" is a equally bizarre omake...

My review on FF.net still stands.

p.s. learn to use "quotations" to differentiate dialog from descriptive writing.

p.s.s. The title of your fic borders dangerously close to my newest endevour of "Ranma three quarters".

[timdraco]

well im gonna probably rewrite that first prologue. i know have a coarthor, and hes helping me out with it. it should be ready to post in about 3or4 days so be on the look out for it. I want to thank you guys for all you're advice and comments. I think that having feedback will help me out in the end. To answer if i have written anything before? well i have its just ive only written poems and ballads not fanfics. I'll try to write better, and get some good storys out.


Timdraco

[Anime_Freak317]

Word of advice when you do. WHEN you repost it, first delete what you have on FF.NET, have it previewed here, and don't make it an "IDEA" style fic. Make sure it's atleast 1000 words long (A/N not included).

By the way, nice work on the reformat, but so far...it still sucks.

[timdraco]

Story was discontinued. Reasons: well it just sucked from the get go wasnt really sure what i was thinking back then. But as the saying goes what dont kill you makes u stronger. I think what im gonna do is find someone to help me out on my fics or try to help someone else out on one of there own fics. Im the type of writer that is better at adding to a story then making one up. Though i do get some good story ideas every blue moon lol.

Timdraco

[Sunshine Temple]

Not sure if this counts as forum necromancy.

Yes, you do have new information but after 23 months of inactivity you simply post to reaffirm that the story is dead.

Strange.