a fic idea where ranma as a senshin no1 has done before

[aceina]

i have a muscle problem hard for me to typ pls forgive anything u cant read ask and i will fix


ok first note i need help with this not so much ideas (thoe i do need those to) as some 1 to help edit (i am alowed to ask for help editign right if not im sry) info it will be ranma locked s female and ranma will end up with akane (thoe that will be the sequel and how it happens is a secret to every 1 but the person who helps me) o 1 last thing ranma has black hair in female form in this fic (like in the manga) ok on to fic discription


it starts in the fight with saffron and ends just like in canon excpet when ranma goes to destory the statue to get the watter to akane to save her life ranmas arm locks of for 1 second do to all the battel then fires the blast thus ranma was 1 second to slow to save akane ryouga is the first on the spot and sees ranma crying over akanes corps then ranma asks ryouga to do him a favor ask ryouga to tell every 1 his body turned to ask in the fight after teh last atack was used ryouga agrees and ranma just walks off

ranma ends up going to the musk to lock his curse not feeling like a man for losing the 1 he loves gets herb to agree to locking the curse after that ranma just leavs and travels china fora few months end sup findigna way to remove his now her fear of cats (i dont want to do the tired gag of ranma is afirad of luna and artimis bit) after awhile decides to return to japan and ends up in juban

at this point ranma is verry depresed and has decied she wants to die but wants to die fighitng so thats why she came to juban to fight the monsters that often show up there (another note this fic will be after the salor galxy bit and the senshin will be based on manga anime and comen fic potryal of them) ranma ends up in school and has a new name (not sure of what at this point not ranko thoe i want somethign that will fit this more dark and depresed ranma)

any ways when ranma faces the demons she is ina costume (nota fuku YET) she whears black robe and sivler mask (still workign on details) any ways after about 4 or 5 tiems fighitng geting beat up adn the sneshin helpign she finaly gets badly injured (moon and saturn are not on the sceen so no 1 there to heal her) they rush her to the hospitel (mask is broken so they lern who its the new girl at school (aka ranma) who ahs been fighitng)

during the next atakc ranma leavs the hospitel hoping to final die but jsut before she does akanes spirt coems to ranma and convies her to not give up and to live on thenr anms senshin symbols glows on her for head she gets transformation pin and becoems sailor black hole

and that is all i will share for now pls contatct me on this site or at my email if u would be willing to help

[Battlekrome]

as a translation:

Ranma fails to save Akane with Saffron.

Ends up deciding to commit suicide but doing it the Armor way. (aka I wan't to die but YOU aren't going to kill me)

Juuban has all these large monsters... ends up going to school there for some odd reason. (Ranma must be easily defeated by truancy officers)

Encounters Senshi / Finally gets hurt enough that he needs medical assistance or at least enough that he falls unconcious.
(Costumed up to blend in so to speak)

Ranma leaves hospital to fight a new youma and hopes that it will be able to kill him in his injured state... Akane's spirit stops him and causes him to transform into Sailor Black hole (Sun, Earth, Nemesis, Vulcan whatever).

Setting:
post Ranma canon AU at Saffron
SM post Galaxia

Comments:

Ranma wouldn't care about locking his curse (he'd just not care what form he was in).
As cold water is much easier to get than hot he would end up female much more than male.

Also since he's basically suiciding he wouldn't care for little things like bathing and such (caring for wounds maybe) but thats only if he wants to die in combat .

As for a Costume more a torn robe/blanket and more likely facepaint / dirt.

School wise there are these flaws
money to buy school supplies / clothes and a place to rent/stay.

now there are three things most sailor moon fics need:
A: Bad guys (Beryl, Doom Tree etc).
B: Bad guys motivation (Energy, Food for Tree).
C: bad guys methods (Random set up for draining people, random monster rampage or etc).

Solid set up for most part but any more meat to the idea? beyond Ranma and Sailor moon.

[aceina]

well the villen is goign to be sailor chaos and her minons do mass destruction and actuwlaly kill some ppl simply to spread chaos so that tehre is enough fear malice chaos wtv word u want to use for her to manfest in phycal form

as for the curse locking that part is for atonement for failing akane

and as for school well thats about not drawign atention thoe i hadent thout about money ill have to think something out for that

i dont want to give away to many plot details thoe

[Sailor Sedai (Ellf)]

First thing's first... Other than your spelling errors, this seems like a well thought out idea.

I understand that you have a problem that makes it hard to type, but perhaps you could type slower to be more accurate? It's a little disconcerting to see what is apparently a wall of text that is poorly spelled and capitalized.

I'm no mod, and I don't know if they'd warn you for this, so I'm not going to threaten anything.

As for the idea itself, it seems to be a collaboration of several ideas and could work if done right. I hope you have the writing skill to make it so... and very patient prereaders.

[Battlekrome]

as for the curse locking that part is for atonement for failing akane

it seems a little extreme for someone who is going to go off and kill themselves to go out of their way to curse lock when they only expect to live for a small time

don't see a large enough motivation
the I lost Akane and thus my manhood is a decent reason but since we are basically spoonfed it. It seems off.

As for writing quality, you don't write too bad overall just the netspeak / errors(at least as not as bad as one guy i pre-read for)