REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby LawOhki » Sun Apr 18, 2010 3:22 pm

“If you do that again, you’ll find out what becoming a real vampire’s meal is like.” Ranma said evenly and without emotion. She gave Bella no time to complain before she knocked the girl out with a well placed attack to the head. Catching the body before it could fall to the ground like a ragdoll, she shoved the girl roughly in the truck.

That done, Ranma started off down the road at a leisurely pace, and pulled out her cell phone to check in. “Hey Walter.” She greeted the butler.

“Ah Miss Ranma, are you calling to confirm removal of the target?”

“Not yet, there’s a group of vampires here who I’m checking out. They aren’t the ones feeding off people apparently, they think they’re vegetarians because they feed off bears and stuff. I forgot what type they’re supposed to be, but they don’t sleep, don’t have fangs, and have reflective skin.”

“Acknowledged, how many are there?”

“Five of the vegetarian ones and three that are feeding from humans; all the same type.”

“I’ll talk to Sir Integra and see what she wants to do. Expect a call within the hour.”

“Right-o.” She ended the call.

X x x x x x

She didn’t even get to knock before the small vampire Alice met her at the door. It would be interesting to find out what the limits of their senses were and what other special abilities they may have. Again the question of how similar and how different they were came up in her mind. There were so few of her type of vampire, that she was intensely curious about the others.

What little contact she had with this type had soured her to the entire experience. Like most types they were barely controlled animals, having no concept of what the taking of blood meant. Then there was the arrogance to call themselves vegetarians. As far as she was concerned, that was claiming eating a chicken was different than a cow or any number of animals. Which in her mind was being a complete hypocrite.

“We weren’t really expecting you till later.” Alice seemed reserved about this.

“Not much else to do around here at this time of night. I’m sure the humans will go off to a bar, stay home and watch television. There isn’t much for a vampire to enjoy.” Ranma answered with a shrug.

“Ah, well come in, we were just watching the news.”

Ranma deposited her tennis shoes next to the doorway inside, since she wasn’t planning a fight or to leave soon, she thought it only polite.

“You didn’t have to take them off.”

“Just a habit from my human life.” She answered.

“Hmm, you sound like you’re from the UK but you don’t look it.”

Ranma scrunched up her face in thought as she walked with the shorter female through the home. “Japan is my real home, but the city of fog has grown on me.” She altered her face to look Caucasian while Alice was looking.

“How did you do that?” The girl seemed amazed at the talent and they stopped.

“I’m a natural shape shifter.” She quickly changed into a male the same height. “Form means little to us.”

“That’s incredible.”

‘Heh, she’d probably be more amazed that this is what I should really be.’ Ranma smirked and went back to her eternal body. “I take it none of you have such an ability.”

“No, none of us can do that.”

“What can you do?” Ranma twisted her head to one side. “Physical strengths, heightened senses, and your ability to predict things? Is that it? Oops I forgot, you all have permanent body glitter and you don’t sleep.”

“If you’re trying to provoke me it’s not going to work.” Alice shook her head.

“I’m just trying to find out more. What’s it like not to sleep? Don’t you get really really bored?”

“You find ways to pass the time.”

“Yes, you do.” The eldest most vampire butted in as he walked down the steps. “Alice would you mind giving us some time alone?”

“Of course.” The petite girl did a polite bow before hopping nimbly up the steps.

“I don’t think we’ve been properly introduced yet. I’m Carlisle Cullen. I hope we can move past any unpleasantry and resolve this situation.”

“Unpleasantry? It’s been kind of fun.” Ranma answered. “Little bit annoying too.”

“My son Edward is rather unhappy with you. Please try not to provoke him further, he is deeply involved with Ms. Swan. As we all are. She is family-- and we protect family.”

“So when do you plan to turn her?” Ranma doubted that any group of vampires would have a human in their midst for long.

“That’s Bella’s choice if she wishes to become a vampire. Personally I would prefer that she remain human and be spared the pain of the change.”

Ranma was about to point out that life with vampires was one that ended up taking the choice away from humans, but her phone vibrated in her pocket. “Just a sec.” Seeing that it was Walter, she flipped it open. “Yea?”

“Sir Integra has told me that you are to eliminate all targets.”

“Alright.” Ranma replied resolutely and snapped the phone shut.

“Are we-- targets?” Carlisle asked seriously, his body tensed.

“No.” Ranma lied, needing them to meet up with three she had been originally sent here to deal with. “Only the ones preying on humans are targets.”
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby Spokavriel » Sun Apr 18, 2010 5:13 pm

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Slipping from her position, she took off down jumping down the steep hill.
Have an extra down? Or is Twilight suffering from downs?

Hang off the ground? I didn't quote it but I'd rather think of it as hanging off cave/tree hollow walls and ceilings.


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She wondered, sliding over the edge to hand down, and watch the pair.
hang down.

The man raised himself up out of his swivel chair to leave over the desk and look down at her.
I think you wanted lean not leave

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Ranma's complaint about the message on her phone gave me an odd thought. Any chance for Halloween Ranma could dress up like Demona while Ceres dresses up like that Hybrid Elisa clone Gargoyle? Maybe even try to talk Alucard into being their Goliath or Thailog?

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Ranma suggested, if the girl’s vampire friend was there, she could force either kill him or use him.
I can't even guess how you were going to phrase this. The last half is too badly mangled.

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Edit: Leaving this in but I'm the one with a brain dead moment not the fic on this section.
“So why am I supposed to trust you, aren’t you a vampire as well?”
Brain-dead moment here. In his office, moments ago, She just told him She IS a Vampire!
“I’m a vampire as well. Forget any kind of fiction you may have read. We’re real and my organization has worked long and hard to make sure that humans like you live happy little lives thinking you’re the top of the food chain.”
Remember? So is his character really stupid enough to phrase his question like that?

“Then I had to leave my family and move halfway across the world, followed by months to deal with the changes.”
Months dealing with the changes? months needed to deal?

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Guess Ranma isn't going to be getting any sleep for a while on this mission. And doesn't all that time in sunlight make her burn through her reserves faster? Why do I get the feeling she's going to have to ask the Chief of police where the nearest prison is to hurry along a death row inmate?

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Oh brother Integral is going to just Love that decision on just what classifies a target instead of the clear order intent.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby LawOhki » Sun Apr 18, 2010 5:34 pm

Spokavriel wrote:Page 2 Story Post 2
Ranma's complaint about the message on her phone gave me an odd thought. Any chance for Halloween Ranma could dress up like Demona while Ceres dresses up like that Hybrid Elisa clone Gargoyle? Maybe even try to talk Alucard into being their Goliath or Thailog?
All three if they got into it could simply take on that form completely. But maybe having them create costumes might be funny.
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Guess Ranma isn't going to be getting any sleep for a while on this mission. And doesn't all that time in sunlight make her burn through her reserves faster? Why do I get the feeling she's going to have to ask the Chief of police where the nearest prison is to hurry along a death row inmate?

Or Ranma will just find the nearest human and have some noms. It's not like she couldn't blame it on the other vampires if anyone asked.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby Spokavriel » Sun Apr 18, 2010 5:48 pm

I can't see her wasting the blood to disguise her kill as one of the trio's Especially after her disgust at how much was left to seep into the ground.

I can't imagine a forensics pathologist who wouldn't be able to tell a difference between one of her kills and that group of frenzied rabid knuckleheads. I imagine it like the difference between someone killed by gang members who shanked them with a knife and stole their cash Vs someone taken out with a garrote, by a pro Hitman. Both leave cuts on the victim but you can easily tell allot of differences.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby frice2000 » Sun Apr 18, 2010 10:47 pm

“Are we-- targets?” Carlisle asked seriously, his body tensed.

“No.” Ranma lied, needing them to meet up with three she had been originally sent here to deal with. “Only the ones preying on humans are targets.”


After he asked that question I filled in the next line in my mind with Ranma simply smiling manically and saying yes. Not seeing that made me numb inside. You better not be playing with false advertising and leaving with Ranma not killing them all! :wink: Anyway nice snippet and very nice pacing.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby LawOhki » Sun Apr 18, 2010 11:38 pm

frice2000 wrote:After he asked that question I filled in the next line in my mind with Ranma simply smiling manically and saying yes. Not seeing that made me numb inside. You better not be playing with false advertising and leaving with Ranma not killing them all! :wink: Anyway nice snippet and very nice pacing.

You don't like Ranma lying to his face to spend the night and part of the day with them while plotting their demise? Ranma's being an evil little minx here.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby Spokavriel » Sun Apr 18, 2010 11:45 pm

Evil or justified? These glitterbags have been just short of attacking how many times? I think hanging out with them and getting that needed rest can help show if any of them actually deserve to be left off the target list. And I can only think of 1 so far that I would. But I can't remember her name off hand.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby frice2000 » Mon Apr 19, 2010 12:13 am

LawOhki wrote:You don't like Ranma lying to his face to spend the night and part of the day with them while plotting their demise? Ranma's being an evil little minx here.


Heh...I just don't think she'd care enough to play with them and wait till later. More of a challenge to tell them to their face that she plans on killing them all and then go deal with the others later. What you're going for is in character too but I like the idea of her response simply being bullets.

What you are going for is more evil though yes.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby LawOhki » Mon Apr 19, 2010 10:11 pm

Ranma did not stay around the vampire group, or as they said, coven. She found a seat in an empty room and simply relaxed herself. By doing so she ended up appearing for all purposes dead. She thought of it as zoning out because literally she didn’t think, didn’t breath, and didn’t even react to outside stimuli if she was really deep into it. When coming out of this state she almost felt better than sleeping.

Her body was surprisingly empty for a vampire. By taking blood from humans a vampire took their soul and made them into familiars but she always removed the ones she took. But not one, one very special soul had been kept. She had even provided this soul with his own special place, a kingdom of pain that would last for as long as she existed.

Creating the mental construct had been easy and like always, Luke Valentine was waiting for her to visit. Within the construct she was an actual physical representation and she stopped the never ending horde of cats that were tearing into his flesh. The tiger sized housecats fell away into darkness till only their eyes were visible. Luke quivered from where he lay on the dirt floor of the pit, his body naked but the damage inflicted by the cats was always healed before the next cut and bite. She hadn’t dominated Luke’s mind, he was exactly as he was while alive, a mind within her mind.

“Are you having fun yet?” She asked, placing her hands on her hips, and leaning over him. Luke begged and pleaded with her to stop it, to kill him, and free him from the never ending nightmare. Kicking him roughly across the pit to slid into the wall, Ranma laughed cruelly. “Maybe in a few more decades. Then-- maybe it’ll end.”

Ordering the cats to attack again, Ranma watched momentarily as large chunks of flesh were ripped from Luke’s body only to be replaced before the meat had hit the ground. She had found a cure for the fear of cats by giving it all to him. Honestly she should thank Luke for that blessing. Vanishing from her hidden world, she was freed to feel the outside one again, and felt someone nudge at her left shoulder, she slowly came back to herself. Her eyes opened up to see the pretty blonde vampire standing over her. Blinking, she rubbed at her red eyes and sat up on the daybed she had been laying on. Glancing at an ornate clock sitting on a table, she found that it had been five hours.

“Yes?” Ranma asked slowly, briefly checking out the expensive clothing the vampire was wearing, and feeling a bit underdressed while waiting with this group.

“Why are you really here?” She asked snootily.

“Well it’s either hang around with a human who is getting on my nerves, or get on yours.” Ranma smirked. It was clear that she was causing considerable anxiety among the group. “So why did you-- wake me?”

“I didn’t know there were other types of vampires. So I want to know more.”

“Like?” Ranma picked up her feet to sit crosslegged on the daybed, deciding to indulge the other female.

“Are you able to be human again?”

“No, I’m even less of a human or living being than you are.” Which was true, she was power given form, they were form given power.

“Are you able to have children?”

Ranma raised an eyebrow at the question and the seeming special significance she felt coming off the girl. “In-- a way.”

“What’s that supposed to mean?”

“You don’t have special connections to your Sire?” She was confused. Nearly every type of vampire that she knew of had strong parental connections to any fledgling.

“No, in fact I hated Carlisle after he turned me.” The girl waved her hands for her to scoot over so she could sit down, and Ranma complied.

“That’s too bad.” Ranma really did feel bad about that, to go through such a dramatic change, and hate the one who did it to you would be horrible. “I can only talk about it from the fledgling standpoint, but I feel closer to my Sire than I ever did to my human family. He’s my father, mother, and sibling all at once. It doesn’t seem to always be like it, but I’m sure it’s the same for him.” She smiled wistfully thinking about how fun it would have been if Alucard had come alone.

“If it wasn’t for Edward’s human we could go back to being a family again.” The girl said suggestively.

“What’s your name anyways?”

“Rosalie Hale.”

“Well Rosalie, are you asking for me to do something about her?” Ranma kept her voice low, knowing that even in such a big house, an attentive vampire would be able to hear.

“She’s putting us all at risk.”

“Don’t worry.” Ranma smiled reassuringly. “After tomorrow she’ll be a non-issue.”


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Yes, that bit with Luke Valentine has ALWAYS been part of the main story.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby Spokavriel » Mon Apr 19, 2010 10:31 pm

So now we have a reassurance of the countdown to termination. Guess that Mind-scape is one way to deal with the Neko-ken. I wonder will Ranma have to kill the Police chief and his daughter too for knowing too much?
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby frice2000 » Mon Apr 19, 2010 11:32 pm

fun it would have been if Alucard had come alone.


Think you meant for alone to be along. Or you could mean that you wish Alucard had gone and dealt with them by himself but that seems out of context.

Wow poor Luke. Tortured for decades by mean little kitties for Ranma's enjoyment and benefit. Nice snippet here and the coming death of all Ranma surveys just looks to be getting to be a larger and larger bloody destructive swath. In some ways I feel bad for the Twilight characters. Not their fault their creator is pathetic she put some compelling features into her creations and then buried it under layers of crap.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby LawOhki » Tue Apr 20, 2010 8:05 pm

“You’re going to play baseball?” Ranma looked at the vampire group doubtfully. They had all dressed in variations on a baseball uniform, making them look like some demented baseball team.

“Alice says that’s what we were doing when the rogues show up.” Carlisle answered.

“So are you doing it because she said so or because you were already planning to?” Ranma wondered if those visions were self-fulfilling ones.

“Little bit of both.” The muscular Emmet answered, twisting his baseball cap so it sat sideways on his head.

“We had planned for Bella to join us.” Edward continued to glare at her.

“Edward.” Carlisle chastised.

“We only get to play when there’s a thunderstorm.” Alice switched back to the conversation at hand. “So we try not to waste it, for any reason.”

“That seems just a bit weird.” Ranma didn’t see how hitting a ball with a bat could be that noisy. It was like when she fought Ryoga after the breaking point training, after a certain point; you just couldn’t impart that much force on a freely moving object. Although having never played sports since becoming a vampire, it might be true, but unlikely.

Since it was nearly noon, she wasn’t interested in being specific or even talking. Sleep was what she wanted even though she wasn’t about to get it. Ranma allowed them to lead the way to where they were going to play by a short run through the forest. Mistakenly she had not brought any blood with her the night before.

“When are they going to be here?” She asked Alice while glancing around the abandoned field. There was a baseball diamond barely visible through the grass, and signs that it was once used for more than just a casual game if the bleacher frame lacking wooden seats was any indication.

“They’ll hear us playing.” Alice answered.

“I’ll just be over here taking a nap.” Behind where home plate would be, she sat down to lean against a tree. “Wake me when they show up.” Buttoning up her jacket to cover more of her body, even though the sun was covered by thick black clouds, she decided that she should find a hat for instances like this.

The fierce crack of thunder and brief flash of bright light made her jerk out of her drowsy state. Crossing her arms grumpily, she watched the vampires begin to play baseball. The bat hitting the ball was loud, but nothing past a small caliper rifle round. All this fuss over having to play in a thunderstorm must be a problem with not being able to alter their senses like she could.

Looking through half lidded eyes, she analyzed their strengths. Edward was very fast and she didn’t think she could actually catch him in a foot race. Emmet would likely be very strong just by nature of his build. None of the females seemed to be particularly strong in either strength or speed, Rosalie couldn’t even make it around the small diamond before Edward had chased down the ball she had hit from the forest beyond the field, and thrown it to home. Alice was pitching and should be able to throw the ball hard enough that no one could hit it but Rosalie, Carlisle, and then Emmet hit the ball on the first pitch.

Trying to decide on which one to deal with first, Alice floundered with her next pitch, and the ball didn’t even get halfway to the batter. The tiny vampire stared blankly forward for a moment before turning to lock on a trio coming out of the forest in center field. The trio consisted of two men and one woman. The Cullen coven quickly gathered around Alice to face the new comers.

“Finally.” A toothy grin spread over Ranma’s face.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby Spokavriel » Tue Apr 20, 2010 8:22 pm

Alice is the one I couldn't think of the name of earlier. I can't think of any reason for any of the others to live. But at least her gift could be trained and expanded on while everything else is generic as hell.

So will the need for a Werewolf hunt become apparent before the "coven" of "vegetarians" are all taken out?

That took a quarter hour to finish typing. Everything using the word is an insult to any and all true Covens and Vegetarians in every way possible. Hello Vegetarians don't eat meat! They only eat Animals! ok stopping this now.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby LawOhki » Tue Apr 20, 2010 10:40 pm

Spokavriel wrote: Alice is the one I couldn't think of the name of earlier. I can't think of any reason for any of the others to live. But at least her gift could be trained and expanded on while everything else is generic as hell.

So will the need for a Werewolf hunt become apparent before the "coven" of "vegetarians" are all taken out?

That took a quarter hour to finish typing. Everything using the word is an insult to any and all true Covens and Vegetarians in every way possible. Hello Vegetarians don't eat meat! They only eat Animals! ok stopping this now.

No reason to go after the shape shifters. They aren't even on Ranma's radar.

Alice will of course refuse, perhaps with a brief moment of Ranma admitting just how little she wants to kill them just for being vampires, before doing it.
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Re: REN Side Story - Kill the Cullens

Postby frice2000 » Tue Apr 20, 2010 10:41 pm

So...LET MORT...IMMORTAL KOMBAT begin I see? I look forward to the blood and destruction! I do hope Bella doesn't die and simply is left alone to be miserable and 'dying'. Heh...she'll get over him with some good psychological help. Hopefully she'll witness them all die horribly though and never get over the mental scars.
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