Shadow General wrote:Even though I rarely get a chance to read fics nowadays, authors like Sunny and Trimatter are the ones who will always keep me coming back.
Wow, that's great to hear.
Excellent first chapter. I think you set a good tone with the writing style, and the fact that pretty much every character recieves some development is a big plus for me. There are way too many fics out there that don't take into account the fact that people change as time goes on.
Yes, that's something Tri and I both share. The emphasis on character development. So many stories have Ranma doing amazing things, become a Senshi, get married, die, be reborn, have to deal with the destruction of the world, or get stuck in what's essentially hell for a while, and through it all... he/she doesn't change.
People are affected from their experiences. The challenging part is figuring out how it will affect them.
Metroidvania wrote:Yes, but from Ranma's perspective, this changes very quickly from a job, albeit a good one, to something a heck of a lot more personal.
Don't get me wrong, I'm not complaining in the slightest, especially with the kinship Ranma and Hotaru have.
Exactly, it goes from a job to something alot more personal. And Ranma's very invested in Hotaru's well being.
What I meant was that this is another possible example behind a potential pre-destined plot.....the rapport, especially with the production of Ranma's healings, really makes me wonder.
Well, Setsuna's thoughts and worries durring this chapter should give some hints as to how much of this she planned, and what her direct involvement in events was.
And from your earlier comments on the time frame, and the fic, I gather I'm pretty close, especially remembering Pluto's comments on the Timegate being closed, at least for a while, which is why she can live with the other outers in canon-verse.
Heh Sailor Moon SuperS, first few episodes of the manga.
Fafhrd wrote:I have to add my kudos to the rest. Good Job
2 points, take'em or leave'em.
I do have a hard time believing Ranma hasn't been discovered, he used his real name, and is using a variation on a previous disguise. Even if it is as a girl. Oh wait, Setsuna just smiles whe Ranma brings it up. Thought So.
Thanks much for the compliment.
Yes, Setsuna can be handy. Even when using her in a less omnipotent potrayal ;p
Also, I have noticed many people using an internal monologue where Ranma thinks to "Herself" and then gags or acks or in some way reacts negatively to that thought. I.E.
For some reason that fact was hard to admit to herself. Herself.
Herself? She's a guy... she was a guy... is a guy... right? She shook off that uncomfortable train of thought without any effort.
I would never refer to myself in my own thoughts as himself, or if cursed, herself. I or myself would be the words of choice.
But not using the personal singular these are not direclty her thoughts. These are her thoughts as viewed by an outsider. And as such they are translated as third person pronoun.
Japanese does have gender specific first pesonal pronouns. She could have been using the female one to get the same reaction, but that could be klunky in execution.
Anyway, it doesn't appear to bother others so do as you wish, but it seems incorrect to me.
Technically it is. As she would not hear the herself in her own head. Hmm.. it is pretty minor though
And remember, these are not things that detract from the overall achievement this chapter is. It covered a lot of character growth, and touched on potential growth and problems from the future.
For those dissapointed in the lack of locker room scenes remember this. In the manga Ranma has no problem working in a public bath on the girl side after Mousse lost thier money. Female nudity does not bother Ranma. So it was not important, of much greater importance will be the reaction of Ranma's new female friends to the revelation of his curse, when and if that happens.
Exaclty, this story is mostly the growth and journy of Ranma down this path.
And how many other people caught the fic references such as: Clothes make the...
*coughs*
TerraEpon wrote:Lemme just add some praise here, though it's no surprise considering the authors.
We've been getting that alot, guess there's some sort of synergy at work here.
This is exactly the type of fic I love (or at least, as far as semi-serious fics go). Yeah there's a bit of angst, but it's not there just to make it "oooh teh drama" or anything.
Yup, personally I hate angst-fics. Angst is an emotion people have, but it's too passive of one and in writing makes things too much of a "pitty-party".
And I agree with the person who said it was a nice change of pace to use SM characters without the whole senshi part being added.
Being Senshi is a big part of their lives, but it's not the only part. I agree, that often gets missed in many stories.
